Rage. Tame the anger of beasts that go hunting. Jealousy. Reason with the power of the beast that is better than the rest. Gluttony. Feed the appetite of the beasts or become one with them. Did I say beast? I meant queens. Welcome all, to the Thirteenth. The day that the moon shines the brightest and glows red. If you are between the ages of twelve and fifteen please dress up and step forward. Do your veins glow orange under the blood moon? To the hyenas with you! Or do your veins glow purple? Hurry and go join the bears! Survive the Redwoods or the Rage lands before morning and you will live like royalty in the inner city. But if you don’t survive…your blood will feed the power of the monster that claims your life, making them stronger, faster, smarter for their true bond. Two sisters are unfortunately Separated on the thirteenth. That day a bear soldier was born. And a hyena had a feast. After the death of Akantha, Reverie lives her life in the inner city as the new queens favorite secret weapon. Losing her older sister the day of the thirteenth has left her cold and unjust. She was only a child but now she’s grown into a gorgeous young clan member. And though the hyenas and bears live in harmony in the inner city protecting those of the outer city from the unknown land that surrounds them, secrets are revealed when a stranger shows their face, their blade and their dragon. Who is the threat? Who can be trusted? Who's keeping secrets? And who… will…die?

Requirements & Requests

please help me with worldbuilding, character voice, flow and pace. please give me notes on the emotions you felt during a scene and if you can leave me a note about if you liked the concept or not that would be great. I would love to hear how I can make anything better. i need to know if my action scenes are up to par and if they can be seen in your head properly. spell checking or line by line would be great but not a main focus. please also let me know if the characters are consistent in their motives and their speech. thank you so much! any notes are appreciated.

Trigger Warnings:

dark. like...gruesome and language. no smut.