"Ten year old Harper Chase struck a deal with a demon to escape her neglectful, loveless life. The cost? Her hand. "In it's place she gained 'The Acolyte', a mechanical hand pulsing with supernatural power over technology. However, the mysterious, masked demon known as 'Doctor-Ace' frames Harper for her father's murder, kickstarting her life as a fugitive. "Now fifteen years old, and the most wanted felon in the state of Enfeucran, she still hunts him to settle her vendetta. Doctor-Ace kidnaps Harper's old friend, forcing Harper to ally herself with her childhood bully. "Amidst this blood-fuelled game of supremacy to determine predator from prey, one thing is certain: when you strike a deal with the devil, your life becomes the dealer's choice. "The first in the series." The above paragraph is the blurb for the novel. It is the first book in a dark-urban-fantasy-horror-mystery series called "The Phantasmic Disquiet Series", filled with gore, mystery, and supernatural elements. Initially inspired by "Pretty Little Liars", the story took influence from horror movies, and a few other forms of media and genres. The main villain of the series Doctor-Ace is like a blend of V from "V For Vendetta", the Creeper from "Jeepers Creepers", and Jigsaw from the "Saw" movies.

Requirements & Requests

I would like to know your general thoughts, what you liked and disliked and where I can improve. I am looking for volunteers to read this manuscript, as I do not have any funds to pay for a professional right now. Any plot contrivances and inconsistences that went unnoticed by me will be sorted out if and when pointed out to me. I struggle with character voices, making them sound distinct, so any advice on how I can improve on that would be appreciated. And let me know if you think I've put the story into the appropriate genre.

Comparable Stories:

Pretty Little Liars Jeepers Creepers

Trigger Warnings:

Gore Demonic imagery