I'm translating my book from German to English—it's the first in a trilogy. Since English isn't my native language, I'm looking for feedback on my translated chapters. It's the first book of my planned trilogy. The first book follows a girl who discovers she has magical abilities and is the heir to the throne. The first book focuses on scene setting and world-building.

Requirements & Requests

The first book focuses a lot on world-building and setting the scene, so it might start off a bit slow. I’d love to hear your thoughts, especially on the pacing, clarity, and anything else that stands out to you. Also I need help with grammar&spelling.

Comparable Stories:

The Lux series by Jennifer L. Armentrout, Powerless by Lauren Roberts, Shadow&Bones by Leigh Bardugo

Trigger Warnings:

Underage use of alcohol & depiction of blood