This is only a 400 word prologue that is set a bit into the story. Summary of the project: Leanna, a young woman living on a horse farm in the quiet town of Tassos, leads a double life. By day, she works hard on the farm, and by night, she is an undefeated fighter in the underground pits. Everything changes when she narrowly escapes defeat at the hands of a member of the notorious Crows gang, only to discover an untapped power within her—one she doesn’t fully understand and fears. When tragedy strikes her farm, Leanna is forced to embark on a dangerous journey to rescue her kidnapped lover. Alongside three loyal friends and an enigmatic elder who holds more secrets than she reveals, Leanna confronts her haunted past and starts to unravel the truth about her mysterious powers. As she learns to control her abilities, Leanna discovers not only the strength within her but also the key to her own identity.

Requirements & Requests

Prologue: Just looking for the quality of the tone and whether or not it sparks intrigue. What are part intrigued you the most? If you picked this up at a bookstore and this was the first page would you want to by it to read more? Chapter 1: Do you feel it starts in the right place? Is there too many name drops? What is your first impression of Leanna and Fala? Does some of the world build hints intrigue you? Would you continue to read and why?

Comparable Stories:

Throne of Glass Red Rising The Moon that Hatched

Trigger Warnings:

Mentions of child abuse and SA.