Looking for a volunteer book critiquer

I have a first draft of a book i am making and i would like some advice on it for now its only 20 pages

Details

  • Age Group:Young Adult (13-18)
  • Manuscript TypeSingle Chapter
  • Draft Number:First Draft (spell-checked)
  • Word Count (Rounded Up):Up to 5,000 words
  • Spice LevelNo Spice

Primary Genre:

  • Fiction
  • Romance
  • Historical Fiction

Themes & Tropes

  • Action & Adventure
  • Alternate History
  • Enemies-To-Lovers
  • High Stakes
  • Humour | Comedy
  • LGBTQA+
  • Mythology
  • War & Politics

Requirements & Requests

I request only an honest opinion and if there is anything you dont like i would like your opinion on it or even for suggestions​/​things you would like

Comparable Stories:

Simmilar to song of achiles inspired similar writing style

Trigger Warnings:

Slight racism because of old setting

Manuscript Format

  • Word Online

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